書面表達(dá)感悟高考Passage1 （2016年新課標(biāo)1卷）假定你是李華，暑假想去一家外貿(mào)公司兼職，已寫好申請(qǐng)書和個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)歷（resume）。給外教Ms Jenkins 寫信，請(qǐng)她幫你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。注意： 1. 詞數(shù)100左右; 2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，已使行文連貫?！敬鸢浮緿ear Ms Jenkins,I am Li Hua. I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume, so I dont even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, Im writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.Looking forward to your reply. And Id be really thankful.Yours,Li Hua【亮點(diǎn)】 本文是一篇較為優(yōu)秀的范文。格式正確，要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言通順流暢，很好地完成了寫作任務(wù)。在本文中開頭提出寫信的目的，然后具體講述自己的困難，再提出請(qǐng)求，最后表達(dá)自己的感激之情。所以在內(nèi)容上邏輯性較強(qiáng)。此外，作者還使用了不定式短語(yǔ)In order to get some practical experience, 現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)hoping you can give me some help, 賓語(yǔ)從句if there are something to pay attention to等。經(jīng)典句式this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume也是文章的亮點(diǎn)所在。Passage2（2016年浙江卷）“Planning is good , but doing is better”是一句英國(guó)名言。請(qǐng)以此為題用英語(yǔ)寫一篇100120詞的短文。要求如下： 1. 簡(jiǎn)述你對(duì)這句名言的理解； 2. 用一個(gè)具體事例加以說明； 3. 給出恰當(dāng)?shù)慕Y(jié)尾。注意：1. 文章的標(biāo)題已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）： 2. 文中不得以任何形式透露地區(qū)、學(xué)校、老師或同學(xué)姓名等真實(shí)信息，否則按作弊行為認(rèn)定。Planning Is Good, But Doing Is Better_【答案】Planning Is Good, But Doing Is Better Planning is good as it decides in detail how we do what we want to do. However, a plan can bear no fruit without being actually carried out. My experience in the English speech contest last October is a case in point. A month before the event, I spent hours working out a schedule outlining my goals and practical steps. After that, I set out to read widely for an inspiring topic, wrote a speech, and practiced its delivery in beautiful pronunciation with good public speech skills. I finally came out of the contest as the first prize winner. I know how I achieved my success. It came from good planning and better doing combined.【解析】試題分析：本文為一篇開放式作文。題目給出標(biāo)題和提綱。結(jié)合題目可判斷出主要是介紹將計(jì)劃付諸實(shí)施的重要性。圍繞這個(gè)主旨去寫，不能跑題。提綱部分還要求三個(gè)方面：1.簡(jiǎn)述你對(duì)這句名言的理解；2.用一個(gè)具體事例加以說明；3.給出恰當(dāng)?shù)慕Y(jié)尾。這就確定了作文的結(jié)構(gòu)框架。在主旨和結(jié)構(gòu)確定下來(lái)后，還要注意文章應(yīng)用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)。寫作時(shí)發(fā)揮自己的想象，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將文章完整地表述出來(lái)。注意要主次分明、詳略得當(dāng)，語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔，同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章自然連貫。最后要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等?！久麕燑c(diǎn)睛】本篇范文短小精悍，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，時(shí)態(tài)、人稱準(zhǔn)確，很好地完成了寫作任務(wù)。在文章開頭，作者緊扣題目，提出自己對(duì)plan的理解，同時(shí)引出下文，然后用自己的親身經(jīng)歷表明要將計(jì)劃付諸實(shí)施非常重要。在文中，作者用到了短語(yǔ)in detail, bear no fruit, carry out, set out to等短語(yǔ)，避免了文章表達(dá)的單一。此外，還用到了賓語(yǔ)從句how we do和how I achieved my success, 以及句型It came from good planning and better doing combined等，這些都給文章增加了亮點(diǎn)。Passage3 （2016年北京卷）假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。你的英國(guó)朋友Jim 在給你的郵件中提到他對(duì)中國(guó)歷史很感興趣，并請(qǐng)你介紹一位你喜歡的中國(guó)歷史人物。請(qǐng)你給Jim回信，內(nèi)容包括：1. 該人物是誰(shuí)； 2. 該人物的主要貢獻(xiàn)； 3. 該人物對(duì)你的影響。 注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于50；2. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。 Dear Jim, _Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jim, Its great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in Chinese history. As for my favourite figure in Chinese history, it must be Wei Yuan, a great thinker in the late Qing Dynasty. He, in his book, Haiguo Tuzhi (Maps and Records of the World), introduced modern technologies and ideas to China. That opened our eyes to the world. In fact, he inspires me to major in English in college to be a bridge between China and the world. Interested in knowing more? I can find you some books! Just let me know. Cheers!Yours,Li Hua亮點(diǎn)說明：范文使用了詞組hear from, As for, In fact和搭配inspire sb to do sth等，豐富了作文內(nèi)容；范文注意上下文的語(yǔ)意連貫。 【名師點(diǎn)睛】本題偏向于信息介紹類的開放式寫作，對(duì)于應(yīng)用文格式的要求并不高，但對(duì)于語(yǔ)言組織和詞匯積累的要求極高。本次應(yīng)用文并沒有限定考生必須寫某一位歷史人物，但是談及人物的貢獻(xiàn)和對(duì)自己的影響時(shí)，考生有可能會(huì)遇到大量的詞匯障礙，故難度較去年明顯提升。Passage4 （2015年新課標(biāo)1卷）假定你是李華，你校英文報(bào)“外國(guó)文化”欄目擬刊登介紹美國(guó)節(jié)日風(fēng)俗和中學(xué)生生活的短文。請(qǐng)給美國(guó)朋友彼得寫信約稿，要點(diǎn)如下：1. 欄目介紹；2. 稿件內(nèi)容；3. 稿件長(zhǎng)度：約400詞；4. 交稿日期：6月28日前。 注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫的；3. 開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好?！敬鸢浮緿ear Peter,I'd like to ask you to write an article for our schools English newspaper.The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States? And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals, and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant so long as it s interesting and informative. 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28?Im looking forward to hearing from you.Yours,Li Hua【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries.運(yùn)用了過去分詞作后置定語(yǔ)， And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals, and the life of American high school students.運(yùn)用了賓語(yǔ)從句。此外，文章還使用了大量習(xí)語(yǔ)和短語(yǔ)，如be popular among, so long as, look forward to , hear from等。Passage5 （2014年新課標(biāo)2卷）一家英語(yǔ)報(bào)社向中學(xué)生征文，主題是“十年后的我”，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)和你的暢想完成短文。1. 家庭：2. 工作：3. 業(yè)余生活。注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右：2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫：3.開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。【答案】I often imagine what my life would be like in the future . I think my life will be very different in ten years .i will be twenty eight years old by then . I will have my own family, probably with a lovely child . I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer . I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues . Iwill do a good job in whatever I do .In my free time , I will continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming , running and various ball games . On my holidays , I will travel around the world .In a word , my life will be much richer and more colorful .【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇范文短小精悍，要點(diǎn)全面，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練，時(shí)態(tài)人稱準(zhǔn)確，很好的完成了寫作任務(wù)。在文章開頭作者緊扣題目，提出自己對(duì)未來(lái)的暢想，然后從生活，工作，家庭三個(gè)方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短語(yǔ)In my free time , In a word , such as等介詞短語(yǔ)，避免了文章句式的單一。此外，還用到了賓語(yǔ)從句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，這些都給樸素的語(yǔ)言帶來(lái)了亮點(diǎn)。7