我打算下星期去看望我中學(xué)時(shí)的英語老師。她已執(zhí)教三十年，具有豐富的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗(yàn)。她的教學(xué)方法給我留下了深刻的印象。在她的幫助下，我的英語曾有很大的進(jìn)步。學(xué)生習(xí)作·外教批改I will1 plan to visit my English teacher next week.She has been a teacher for 30 years.Withher help，my English improved fastly 2 rapidly.She gave me made a good impression onme.3I studied in No 2 Middle School.My English teacher is was4 a qualified teacher.She alwayshelped us in with our English.She is was friendly.At her class，the class is Her class wasfull of laughing5 laughter so gave me a good impression.6 Ill never forget my Englishteacher.Im I was poor in English，and My my English teacher often tell told me “Where there is awill，there is a way.” So I think if I work hard and try my best to learn English，Ill studywell. So I thought that if I worked hard and tried my best to learn English，I wouldsucceed.Up to now，many years past.7 Many years have passed since then. I always still remembermy English teacher.I want to thank her and give me courage for8 giving meencouragement9.旁批1plan這個(gè)詞已經(jīng)有將來的含義，所以不必再用will。2沒有fastly這個(gè)詞?？梢杂胷apidly或quickly代替。3這才是正確的表達(dá)。4雖然可能這位女士現(xiàn)在還是一位好老師，但你仍然要用過去時(shí)態(tài)，因?yàn)槟阍谥v述你念中學(xué)時(shí)候的事情。5正確的詞組是：full of laughter。6你已經(jīng)說過這句話，沒必要再重復(fù)。7你應(yīng)該用現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)態(tài)，因?yàn)槟阏谡務(wù)撨^去的一件事情對(duì)現(xiàn)在的影響。8正確的結(jié)構(gòu)是：thank someone for doing something。9在這個(gè)語境中encouragement比courage好。同時(shí)，它的意思也不一樣。要確保你所選的詞能準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)你的意思。這是一篇較差的作文。文中的時(shí)態(tài)用得很不好。故事明顯發(fā)生在過去，但是作者用了一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。即便如此，句子結(jié)構(gòu)也不正確。作者的詞性知識(shí)也不足(如：laughing/laughter，courage/encouragement)。高三水平應(yīng)該對(duì)詞性很熟悉并知道如何將它們用在恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z境中。值得肯定的是，文章的內(nèi)容表明作者對(duì)題目要求還是明確的，并較好地回答了題目所要求的內(nèi)容。高分作文秘訣之一：使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)。例如：Instead of (不要說：)A big fire destroy the forest which belong to the villagers.Use (要說：)A big fire destroyed the forest which belonged to the villagers.Instead of (不要說：)The village changed greatly since he left his hometown.Use (要說：)The village has changed greatly since he left his hometown.Instead of (不要說：)Nancy had promised to come tonight.Use (要說：)Nancy promised to come tonight.Instead of (不要說：)So I write to apply for the job.Use (要說：)So I am writing to apply for the job.姓名劉翔性別男籍貫上海生日1983年7月13日身高1.88m體重74公斤項(xiàng)目田徑(110米欄)基本情況2000年8月入選國家青年田徑隊(duì)2002年獲亞運(yùn)會(huì)及亞錦標(biāo)賽冠軍2020年在英國世界室內(nèi)田徑錦標(biāo)賽中獲60米跨欄第三2020年8月27日獲雅典奧運(yùn)會(huì)冠軍，成績(jī)是12秒91，追平世界紀(jì)錄，打破奧運(yùn)會(huì)記錄參考范文：Liu Xiang，with a height of 188cm and a weight of 74kg，was born on July 13,1983 inShanghai.In August,2000，he was admitted to the National Track and Field Youth Team.In2002，he won the gold medals in the mens 110m hurdles at the Asian Games and AsianChampionship.The next year he took third in the 60m hurdles at the World IndoorChampionships in England.On August 27,2020，Liu won the mens 110m hurdles final in12.91 seconds at the Athens Olympic Games，equaling the world record set and breaking theOlympic record.