第四講巧妙遣詞造句，實現(xiàn)升級策略第四講巧妙遣詞造句，實現(xiàn)升級策略(2014高考新課標全國卷高考新課標全國卷)一家英語報社向中學(xué)生征文一家英語報社向中學(xué)生征文,主題主題是是“十年后的我十年后的我”。請根據(jù)下列要點和你的暢想完成短文。請根據(jù)下列要點和你的暢想完成短文。1家庭；家庭；2工作；工作；3業(yè)余生活。業(yè)余生活。注意：注意：1.詞數(shù)詞數(shù)100左右；左右；2可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3開頭語已為你寫好。開頭語已為你寫好。I often imagine what my life will be like in the future._滿分作文：滿分作文：_would like to give an excellent picture of my future life(很好地描繪我很好地描繪我未來的生活未來的生活)in ten years.To begin with(首先首先)，I will make every effort to take good care of my family，especially my aged grandfather because he has _(奉奉獻大部分生活養(yǎng)育兩代人獻大部分生活養(yǎng)育兩代人)_work is concerned(就就工作而言工作而言)，I am determined to become a film-maker_(那種情況下那種情況下)，I shall direct many good movies for the audience.During holiday seasons，I will live in the I often imagine what my life will be like in the future.devoted most of his life to bringing up two generationsAs far asIn that casecountryside，_(在那里空氣在那里空氣新鮮，人們友善新鮮，人們友善)I will enjoy so many interesting activities，_(例如例如)fishing,swimming and visiting old friends.Such will be my future life，one I have been _(夢想夢想)where air is fresh and people are friendlysuch asdreaming of溫馨提示溫馨提示1.巧用詞匯巧用詞匯，give an excellent picture of，to begin with，devote.to；bring up；As far as work is concerned，in that case；such as；dream of2該句是一個含原因狀語從句的復(fù)合句，邏輯嚴密，用該句是一個含原因狀語從句的復(fù)合句，邏輯嚴密，用詞準確，語義連貫。詞準確，語義連貫。As far as work.is concerned的運用使句子緊湊。的運用使句子緊湊。定語從句的使用，符合評分標準對復(fù)雜句式的要求。定語從句的使用，符合評分標準對復(fù)雜句式的要求。倒裝句和定語從句巧妙結(jié)合，與首句相呼應(yīng)，體現(xiàn)了語倒裝句和定語從句巧妙結(jié)合，與首句相呼應(yīng)，體現(xiàn)了語篇的完整性。篇的完整性。一、遣詞方面：一、遣詞方面：1措辭要貼切具體措辭要貼切具體試比較下面句子：一個人正在街上閑逛。試比較下面句子：一個人正在街上閑逛。A man is walking down the street.A man is wandering down the street.通過比較可以看出，前一句不如后一句表達得具體、生動。通過比較可以看出，前一句不如后一句表達得具體、生動。一個詞如果內(nèi)涵越具體，那么在特定的場景中恰當?shù)厥褂盟粋€詞如果內(nèi)涵越具體，那么在特定的場景中恰當?shù)厥褂盟?就會收到意想不到的效果。就會收到意想不到的效果。2要善于運用短語要善于運用短語短語用得好，會給評卷老師留下深刻印象。例如：短語用得好，會給評卷老師留下深刻印象。例如：When he was a child，he wanted to learn everything.(普通普通)When he was a child，he had a strong appetite(胃口胃口)for knowledge.(高級高級)二、造句方面：二、造句方面：1巧用非謂語動詞巧用非謂語動詞運用非謂語動詞，可使文句看起來更簡潔，使語言更加豐富運用非謂語動詞，可使文句看起來更簡潔，使語言更加豐富多彩，重點更加突出，增加文采。多彩，重點更加突出，增加文采。I covered my ears，trying to keep the noise out，but failed.2巧用巧用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)“with名詞名詞/代詞現(xiàn)在分詞代詞現(xiàn)在分詞/過去分詞過去分詞/形容詞形容詞/副詞副詞/介詞介詞”結(jié)構(gòu)，常作伴隨狀語以增加被描繪內(nèi)容的生動性和情感性，結(jié)構(gòu)，常作伴隨狀語以增加被描繪內(nèi)容的生動性和情感性，使文章讀起來更簡潔明了。試比較：使文章讀起來更簡潔明了。試比較：He slept all the night and the window was open.(一般一般)He slept all the night with the window open.(高級高級)3巧用復(fù)合句巧用復(fù)合句評分標準中強調(diào)使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和復(fù)雜性，鼓勵考生盡評分標準中強調(diào)使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和復(fù)雜性，鼓勵考生盡量使用較復(fù)雜的結(jié)構(gòu)，并且對由此產(chǎn)生的錯誤采取了寬容的量使用較復(fù)雜的結(jié)構(gòu)，并且對由此產(chǎn)生的錯誤采取了寬容的態(tài)度。如果恰當運用各類從句，就會增加文章的亮點。態(tài)度。如果恰當運用各類從句，就會增加文章的亮點。Soon I became one of the top students in my class，which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.(定語定語從句從句)4巧用倒裝句、感嘆句、強調(diào)句、虛擬語氣句等巧用倒裝句、感嘆句、強調(diào)句、虛擬語氣句等使用這些句式可使文章化平淡為生動，加強語氣，使評卷老使用這些句式可使文章化平淡為生動，加強語氣，使評卷老師感受作者的強烈情感，起到升級文章的作用。師感受作者的強烈情感，起到升級文章的作用。Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly equipped classroom，I found the teachers patient and considerate.(倒裝句倒裝句)5巧用排比等句式巧用排比等句式如能運用一個個排比句、對偶句、不定式或短語，可使文章如能運用一個個排比句、對偶句、不定式或短語，可使文章增色不少，會給評卷老師眼前一亮的感覺。增色不少，會給評卷老師眼前一亮的感覺。The purpose of the program is to make our school more beautiful，to make the air cleaner and fresher，and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live in.亮點詞句：亮點詞句：_full of warmth，love and laughter；show concern for；If；is more likely to be；Otherwise；Meanwhile；are sure to；Since；plays a very important role in；it is up to；contribute to；First of all；pay more attention to；Besides；communicate with；As；If we do so.巧用遣詞造句，升級下面文章巧用遣詞造句，升級下面文章留意一下我們的周邊，可以發(fā)現(xiàn)陪讀現(xiàn)象很普遍。請你根據(jù)留意一下我們的周邊，可以發(fā)現(xiàn)陪讀現(xiàn)象很普遍。請你根據(jù)以下要點寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：以下要點寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：1簡要描述陪讀現(xiàn)象；簡要描述陪讀現(xiàn)象；2分析父母陪讀的原因分析父母陪讀的原因(2至至3個個)；3發(fā)表你對此的看法。發(fā)表你對此的看法。注意：注意：1.詞數(shù)：詞數(shù)：120150；2標題已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。標題已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Should Our Parents Accompany Us in Studying at School_ _ _ _ _ _ _In recent years，many parents choose to accompany their children in studying，which has aroused a wide concern.These parents are willing to leave their hometown，even quit their jobs to follow their children into the campus.Most of them rent an apartment nearby so as to take good care of their children._ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _Parents consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to their children.Meanwhile，it enables them to keep track of their childrens academic performance.Nevertheless，what they have ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent.Thus，they will never develop the ability of self-control in the future.Trust leads to independence.So it seems to me parents should create room for childrens growth and study in order to ensure their overall development.