鄭州市 2014高考英語短文改錯、書面表達一輪訓練（11）附參考范文 【西南師大附中】第一節(jié)：短文改錯（共10小題；每小題1分，滿分10分）此題要求改正所給短文中的錯誤。對標有題號的每一行做出判斷：每行只有一個錯誤，請按下列情況改正：該行多一個詞：把多余的詞用斜線（）劃掉，在該行右邊橫線上寫出該詞，并也用斜線劃掉。該行缺一個詞：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（），在該行右邊橫線上寫出該加的詞。該行錯一個詞：在錯的詞下劃一橫線，在該行右邊橫線上寫出改正后的詞。注意：請在答題卡上作答。I have been planning to join in our college basketball team 76. _next year, so now I am spending as more time as I can 77. _with other people who likes to play. They are teaching 78. _me the most important rules and technique of the game, 79. _and I was getting better all the time. We have a 80. _neighborhood team where plays against other teams in the area. 81. _One of my neighbors is helping rest of us 82. _improved our skills. Tonight we are playing against 83. _one of the best teams in the city, I think we can 84. _beat them if we won't make any mistakes. 85. _*結束書面表達的要求是切中題意,語言準確,條理清楚。寫作既可以體現(xiàn)詞匯、句型、語法等的掌握情況,又可以體現(xiàn)一個人的邏輯思維。因此,寫好一篇短文是件不容易的事。高考命題逐漸向開放式的作文過渡,開放式的作文更有利于考生發(fā)揮自己的水平,其難度也相應提高了。因此,對于開放式的作文,只要短文寫得流暢,表達得清楚,體裁正確,邏輯合理,就應視為是一篇好作文。請參考下面一篇書面表達:寫作要求:出國留學已成為一種潮流,請你就此問題談一談自己的觀點,簡要論述留學的利與弊。詞數(shù)為100左右。范文如下:Nowadays going abroad to study is very popular. Even some primary school students, whose families are well off, are studying abroad, let alone university students and postgraduates. Studying abroad can widen one's view and help learn about the cultures of foreign countries. Of course, it's a good way to learn foreign languages. But studying abroad is not suitable for everyone because of the high cost and fees. If a student's family can't support him and he has to struggle in a foreign country for a living not for his studies, I think he needn't go abroad. He can study well in China and he will be able to become successful.So going abroad to study is one way, but not the only way, to one's education and success.點評:本文從出國熱入手,寫出了作者對出國留學的看法,有利的一面是開闊視野,學習外國的文化和語言;不利的一面是費用太高,并非適合所有學生。作者巧妙地陳述了對留學的贊同和反對,并以結尾句點出了出國留學對于一個人的教育與成功并非是唯一的出路。在寫本篇作文時,在表達上應當注意以下幾點:1.由于高考作文一般要求寫一篇100詞左右的作文,篇幅不易太長,不能隨意發(fā)揮。題材廣泛,但不能失去控制。2.在寫作中要盡力避免使用一些生詞,如:"潮流"(trend)。遇到需要的詞匯而不會表達時,換種說法表達即可。因此,上文的第一句"Nowadays going abroad for studies is very popular."就是一個很好的轉換表達。3.對于這個題目,短文中應當有留學的"利"與"弊"兩方面的內容,不要只論述單方面的內容。4.學會使用一些連接詞以及一些過渡性的詞匯,使行文自然、流暢。如范文中的nowadays, even, but, of course, if, so, I think等。5.注意文章的開頭與結尾句。第一句的作用是引出下文,而結尾句是"畫龍點睛"。*結束短文改錯（共10小題；每小題1分，滿分10分）增加：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（）。并在其下面寫出修改后的詞。刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（/）劃掉。修改：在錯的詞后劃一橫線，并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞。注意：1每處錯誤及修改均僅限一詞;2只允許修改10處,多者(從第11處起)不記分。 Im a middle school student name Li Ming. Im writing to tell you something. Recently Inoticed many of my classmates often go to the cyber cafe near our school. I went there too in the other day. I was surprising to see many students playing computer games, watching films or chat. Some students were even talking about love affairs online. On my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place which we can find much useful informations. The Internet should be a window to the outside world rather than place for games. The Internet is good if we make good use of it. Otherwise, it will give us great harm. So the local government should take measure to make sure that students use cyber cafes positively.參考答案Im a middle school student name Li Ming. Im writing to tell you something. 1namedRecently I noticed many of my classmates often go to the cyber cafe near our school. I went there too in the other day. I was surprising to see many students 2,去掉in 3.surprised playing computer games, watching films or chat. Some students were even 4chattingtalking about love affairs online.5.in On my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place which we can find much useful 5.in 6.whereinformations. The Internet should be a window to the outside world rather than 7 informationplace for games. The Internet is good if we make good use of it. Otherwise, it 8 a placewill give us great harm. So the local government should take measure to make 9do 10 measuressure that students use cyber cafes positively.*結束(4)(25 min.)(2011·沈陽市高三質量檢測三改編)假設你是李華，最近國內一家英文報紙正在討論大學生開網店的問題。以下是你所在班級的討論情況。請你給該報寫一封信，反映討論結果。贊成反對1. 大學生時間充裕，具有豐富的網購經驗；2. 大學生思想活躍，了解時尚需求。1. 大學生開網店浪費時間，會耽誤學業(yè)；2. 大學生缺乏經商經驗，容易失敗。你的觀點注意：1詞數(shù)不少于120；2不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；3開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。Dear Editor， Recently, our class have had a heated discussion on whether college students should run online shops._參考范文One possible version：Recently, our class have had a heated discussion on whether college students should run online shops.Some students think that college students have not only enough spare time but also rich experience in online shopping. Besides, they know the trend of fashion very well, which is helpful for their jobs in the future. Others, however, hold the opposite view that running online shops will waste a lot of time, which can definitely affect their studies. What's more, it is easier for them to fail in the business owing to the lack of experience. As a result, the failure will have a lasting influence on them. In my opinion, college students should focus on studies first. After all, running an online shop requires much time and energy. College students should devote most of their time to studying instead of making money. Yours truly，Li Hua*結束高考英語書面表達講義：教育校園話題作文例2：假設你叫李華，你將作為高三畢業(yè)生代表，根據(jù)以下要點在畢業(yè)晚會上用英文作一簡短的告別演講：1、對三年高中生活的懷念;2、對老師的感謝;3、對母校的祝福。My teachers and fellow students,In a couple of weeks, we'll say goodbye to our mother school. How time flies! Now It's really hard for me to put my feelings into words. The past three years has been really a wonderful journey with you guys, full of laughter and tears.To make the journey safe and fruitful, our great teachers contributed their time, energy, love and the whole heart. Here, we are extremely grateful for all that you, dear teachers, have done for us.It'll soon be the time for us to depart, though unwillingly. But it is not the end. It just means that we're going to begin a new journey.Finally, on behalf of all the graduates present here, let me extend our sincere wishes for our mother school and respectable teachers. Thank you!*結束5. 以下是一本圖書的基本信息及相關報道基本信息：書名：Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother作者：Amy Chua，美籍華人，耶魯*大學教授出版時間：2010年內容：作者用中國傳統(tǒng)方式教育兩個女兒的故事效應：引發(fā)中美教育方式孰優(yōu)孰劣的討論相關報道：中文版：2011年初開始在中國銷售意外反應：多數(shù)中國媽媽不贊同作者的做法最新消息：17歲的大女兒已被哈佛*和耶魯錄取*耶魯：Yale 哈佛：Harvard寫作內容根據(jù)以上信息寫一篇圖書介紹，內容包括：1.圖書的基本信息2.圖書的相關報道寫作要求只能用5個句子表達全部內容評分標準句子結構準確，信息內容完整，篇章連貫【參考范文】5. A book Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother, whose writer Amy Chua is a Chinese American and professor in Yale University, was published in 2010. In it, the writer described how she brought up her tow daughters in traditional Chinese ways. The publication of the book caused heated discussion about which educational method is better-the Chinese one or the American one. The Chinese version of the book began to be sold in China at the beginning of 2011. Although the majority of Chinese mothers disapproved of what the writer did, the latest news revealed that the 17-year-old elder daughter was already admitted to Harvard University and Yale University respectively. *結束2.最近，經常有新聞報道發(fā)生在青少年身上的交通事故，其場面令人觸目驚心。因此，你們班同學對于青少年交通事故的原因及后果進行了一次討論。請你根據(jù)以下內容提示，給某英語報社寫一封信，描述討論結果并針對如何減少該類型交通事故的發(fā)生提出你的建議。原因司機精力不集中，超速行駛酒后駕車青少年不遵守交通規(guī)則邊走邊看書、聽音樂后果青少年輕者耽誤學業(yè)，重者喪失生命讓父母十分擔心建議（自由發(fā)揮，至少兩點）注意：1.詞數(shù)：130-170 2.可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫?！緟⒖挤段摹?.Dear Editor, Im writing to tell you about a discussion our classmates had about the causes and effects of traffic accidents involving teenagers. There is no doubt that both drivers and teenagers are to blame for such traffic accidents. On the one hand, drivers fail to concentrate on their driving or drive above the speed limit. Some drivers even drive after consuming alcohol. On the other hand, teenagers often disobey traffic rules, such as ignoring traffic lights. Also, many teenagers read books or listen to music while walking, which causes traffic accidents. Some teenagers lose their lives and some are badly hurt and need treatment, which cost them plenty of study time due to traffic accidents. This causes parents to worry. Therefore, in order to reduce traffic accidents, I think the government should force drivers to be more responsible when driving. Furthermore, drivers who break traffic rules should be seriously published. At the same time, teenagers should learn more about road safety and always follow the traffic rules. *結束【重慶八中】 第一節(jié) 短文改錯(共10小題; 每小題1分, 滿分10分) 以下標有題號的每一行均有一個錯誤，請找出，并按下列情況改正：此行多一個詞：把多余的詞用斜線（/）劃掉，在該行右邊橫線上寫出該詞，并也用斜線劃掉。此行缺一個詞：在缺詞處加一個漏字符號（），在該行右邊橫線上寫出該加的詞。此行錯一個詞：在錯的詞下劃一橫線，在該右邊橫線上寫出改正后的詞。注意：請在答題卡上作答。Anita Mei was very famous pop singer in Hong Kong. Together76._with her mother, she began to perform in the age of four. In the 77._early 1980s, she took part in a local sing competition and won the78._first prize. The song “Bad Girl” made she famous. The following 79._years saw Anita make many records. Some of her song were very80._popular. She was always ready to help others, but she made a lot81._of good friends. When SARS hits Hong Kong , she organized82._several concerts with others pop stars, calling on Hong Kong83._people to bravely face the disease. Sad, Anita died of cancer84._in 2003. The lady that whom was brave and beautiful will always be remembered by people.85._Anita Mei was very famous pop singer in Hong Kong. Together 76. a_with her mother, she began to perform in the age of four. In the 77. at _early 1980s, she took part in a local sing competition and won the 78. singing _first prize. The song “Bad Girl” made she famous. The following 79. her _years saw Anita make many records. Some of her song were very 80. songs popular. She was always ready to help others, but she made a lot 81. and/so_of good friends. When SARS hits Hong Kong , she organized 82. hit_several concerts with others pop stars, calling on Hong Kong 83.other _people to bravey face the disease. Sad, Anita died of cancer 84. Sadly _in 2003. The lady that whom was brave and beautiful will always 85. whom be remembered by people.*結束高考英語書面表達講義：議論文寫作6. My Opinion on Cheating in Examinations(我對考試作弊的看法) 整理目前，學校存在少數(shù)學生考試作弊現(xiàn)象。某英文雜志社擬對此現(xiàn)象向中學生征文，標題是“My Opinion on Cheating in Examinations”。請根據(jù)下列提示用英語寫一篇征文稿。內容要點如下：主要原因考試偏多、偏難不用功、懶惰取悅父母、老師個人看法作弊不對，違反校規(guī)要誠實，努力學習（其他看法） 注意：1短文必須包括所有內容要點，可適當發(fā)揮；2短文標題與開頭已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；3詞數(shù)：100左右。4參考詞匯：作弊cheat（v.）My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.As students, we often take examinations at school, but sometimes we have too many examinations whichare too difficult for us. On the other hand, some of us are lazy and don't work hard at our lessons. So when taking examinations, some students sometimes cheat in order to get better results to please their parents and teachers.In my opinion, it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it break the rules of schools. We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations. What's more, we should improve our study methods and get well prepared for examinations. (121 words)我對考試作弊的看法大家都知道一些學生考試作弊。作為學生我們經常參加各種考試。有時有些考試對我們來說太難了。另一方面，我們中有些人學習不用功，所以當他們參加考試時，他們?yōu)槟酶叻秩ト偢改负屠蠋熡袝r就會作弊。依我看，作弊不對，違反校規(guī)。我們學生應當誠實，用努力學習采取得好成績，而不是依靠作弊。還有我們要改進學習方法，為考試做好充足準備。*結束- 12 -