第二部分讀后續(xù)寫浙江卷三年考情分析年份寫作類型信息提示體裁話題題材內(nèi)容詞數(shù)要求2018年6月讀后續(xù)寫漢語提示記敘文社會生活父子去農(nóng)場的一次驚險的經(jīng)歷150字左右2017年11月讀后續(xù)寫漢語提示記敘文社會生活童年回憶150字左右2017年6月讀后續(xù)寫漢語提示記敘文社會生活路途中偶遇一只狼150字左右2016年10月讀后續(xù)寫漢語提示記敘文旅游一次旅游的坎坷150字左右命題者說1.考綱要求提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標(biāo)示的關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(150詞左右)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫或概要寫作，兩種形式在不同考次不定期交換使用。2.考查特點(diǎn)讀后續(xù)寫是一種將閱讀與寫作緊密結(jié)合的考查形式，旨在考查學(xué)生的綜合語言運(yùn)用能力。與應(yīng)用文不同，故事續(xù)寫除了要求學(xué)生掌握豐富的詞匯和句式外，還注重學(xué)生的內(nèi)容構(gòu)思和情節(jié)銜接的能力。主要聚焦在以下四個方面：3.選材特點(diǎn)(1)所需閱讀的短文詞數(shù)在350以內(nèi)；(2)多以記敘文、故事類文章或者夾敘夾議類的文章為主，故事情節(jié)曲折、跌宕、起伏，但是，故事線索的邏輯性比較強(qiáng)。4.續(xù)寫特點(diǎn)簡言之，讀后續(xù)寫就是閱讀完一篇還未寫完的文章之后，根據(jù)要求和提示把這篇文章未寫完的部分補(bǔ)充完全，使之渾然一體。它一方面能很好地考查考生對所學(xué)語言知識的實(shí)際運(yùn)用能力，另一方面，它也培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維能力。根據(jù)考試說明該部分的規(guī)定，考生在續(xù)寫文章時，要注意續(xù)寫部分“與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度”，“內(nèi)容的豐富性和對所標(biāo)出關(guān)鍵詞語的應(yīng)用情況”，“應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性”以及“上下文的連貫性”。5.命題趨勢自2016年10月浙江省啟用新題型以來至2018年11月高考，連續(xù)四次考查讀后續(xù)寫，這足以看出讀后續(xù)寫的重要性。但2017年11月的高考讀后續(xù)寫與前兩次的不一樣，出現(xiàn)了標(biāo)題，內(nèi)容也不是有關(guān)遇險的。因此，今后讀后續(xù)寫的文章形式及內(nèi)容會更加豐富，也會給考生留下更大的發(fā)揮空間，只要掌握讀后續(xù)寫的命題規(guī)律和寫作方法，并具備一定的閱讀和寫作能力，該題型就會迎刃而解。(2018·浙江卷6月)閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。It was summer，and my dad wanted to treat us to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque，a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle_Paul，my dad's friend，picked us up from the airport and drove us to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm_house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast，“The day starts at dawn on my farm，”he said, After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens，while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride，and he said yes，as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So，my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats，got on our horses，and headed slowly towards the mountain.“Don't be late for supper，”Uncle Paul cried，“and keep to the track so that you don't get_lost！”“OK！”My dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks，the deep green pine trees，and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(編織的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse._Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark._范文欣賞Paragraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.“What a lovely rabbit！”I shouted with terrific excitement. It was quite different from those I saw in our city, thus immediately stimulating my interest. Dad was also stunned by this special rabbit，gawking at it motionlessly. “Dad, let's catch it as our pet！” I suggested, unexpectedly receiving his prompt agreement. Entirely forgetting what Uncle_Paul had told us，we chased after that pretty rabbit，frantic with rapture. Unfortunately，so clever and swift was it that it disappeared in the forest before long. Not until then did we realize that the last ray of twilight was quickly disappearing among the numerous trees and we couldn't find our track at all！We did get_lost.Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.The bone­chilling wind howled fiercely like a wolf，making the darkness even more suffocating.“Dad，what can we do？”I threw my arms around him tightly，quivering and seized by stark horror.“All is going well！”Dad answered in a gentle voice，calm and mollified.We wandered in the scary forest and didn't know what horrible things would happen to us，hoping to find the way back. Suddenly，we heard the sound of water rolling down the river.We were over the moon and decided to follow the river.After a while，we heard the familiar sound of sheep and then caught sight of the farm_house，The family were waiting for us in the distance.Seeing this，a radiant smile lit up both of our faces.名師點(diǎn)評光線的消退暗示了時間的流逝和黑夜的到來，推動了故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，與下文的getting dark銜接；bone­chilling，scary，horrible等詞的運(yùn)用以及比喻修辭的運(yùn)用，渲染了陰森恐怖的氣氛，也烘托了主人公內(nèi)心的害怕、恐懼；同時，河流和羊的聲音也為故事的結(jié)局提供了線索和出路，給故事畫上了圓滿的句號。一、文本解讀文章主要記敘了父親為了讓大家過一個不同以往的暑假，帶一家人去了Uncle Paul的農(nóng)場。在那里，“我”在父親的陪伴下，體驗(yàn)了一把騎馬歷險記。原文是故事的開始，主要介紹了整個事件發(fā)生的時間地點(diǎn)以及農(nóng)場生活的初體驗(yàn)。在閱讀文本時，我們要帶著when、where、who、what、why、how去理清文本的內(nèi)容和故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)。在梳理故事情節(jié)發(fā)展的脈絡(luò)時，我們要把握住三條線索：時間線、故事情節(jié)線和情感發(fā)展線。時間線(background)one summer day(the first day) in the late afternoonspent the night(the second day) very early in the morningafter the breakfastin the afternoonafter a while故事情節(jié)線根據(jù)以上的時間線，我們可以梳理出各個時間點(diǎn)的故事情節(jié)。大背景是：父親帶一家人去Uncle Paul的農(nóng)場過暑假。第一天：下午uncle到機(jī)場接我們，晚上在農(nóng)場聽青蛙叫和潺潺的水聲。第二天：一早吃過早飯，體驗(yàn)了農(nóng)場的生活，和Tina一起喂鳴，看望父親和uncle一起放羊，同時看到父親騎馬覺得很酷，也想試一試。在“我”的請求之下，父親答應(yīng)陪“我”一起去騎馬。出發(fā)前，uncle叮囑“我們”要沿著足跡走并在晚飯前趕回來，不然會迷路。于是，“我”和父親就出發(fā)了。情感發(fā)展線因?yàn)槭锹糜危恼虑楦谢{(diào)應(yīng)該是積極的，雖然沒有直接的情感表達(dá)，但是從delicious dinner，peaceful，quiet，magic，beautiful這些詞可以看出“我”對于這次農(nóng)場之旅還是比較滿意的，同時從“I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses”可以感受到“我”對騎馬的濃厚興趣。因此，即使下文騎馬迷路，可能會遭遇險境，但最終結(jié)局應(yīng)該不會太糟糕。二、下劃線詞、段首句解讀1下劃線詞解讀讀后續(xù)寫的關(guān)鍵詞對故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展起著重要的作用，因而在構(gòu)思文章的時候，不妨從關(guān)鍵詞入手。已知本文的十個下劃線詞分別是：dad，Uncle Paul，farm house，river，feed，sheep，late，track，get lost，sight。根據(jù)這10個下劃線的詞，我們可以按照記敘文的基本要素進(jìn)行粗略的分類，然后進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的分析：Characters角色類dad，Uncle Paul，sheepPlaces 地點(diǎn)類farm house，river，trackTime 時間類lateActions 動作類feed，get lost，sightCharacter角色要素的選擇上，“我”和dad是毫無疑問必須出現(xiàn)的，因?yàn)楦鶕?jù)已知的文本，下面續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容就是“我”跟dad去騎馬。Uncle Paul也幾乎是一個必選項。因?yàn)橄挛牡那楣?jié)中可以有很多的場景出現(xiàn)，比如最終是Uncle Paul找到了迷路的“我們”，或者“我們”在迷路后想起了Uncle Paul的叮囑，以及最終回到了Uncle Paul的農(nóng)場。至于sheep則是一個可以考慮的備選，可以將它設(shè)定為路上看到的風(fēng)景，也可以是回農(nóng)場的線索之一。Places地點(diǎn)的設(shè)定，能確定的是farm house是用得上的，因?yàn)檫@是終點(diǎn)。river的角色可以跟sheep一樣，用于環(huán)境描寫或者是幫助主人公回去的一大線索，因?yàn)榍拔奶峒稗r(nóng)場附近是有河流的?！皌rack”這個詞其實(shí)在這篇文章里是個挺關(guān)鍵的詞，主人公正是因?yàn)槠x了原來的軌跡，才迷路了。當(dāng)然如果不理解這個詞的意思，那么建議還是慎重選擇，以免影響故事情節(jié)的流暢。Time時間中l(wèi)ate設(shè)定了故事發(fā)生的時間：天色已晚。這個詞很關(guān)鍵，因?yàn)闀r間的變化必然帶來周圍環(huán)境的變化，進(jìn)而影響人物心理活動的起伏，是第二段情節(jié)中不可或缺的一點(diǎn)。Action中的get lost是必須出現(xiàn)的，這是文章矛盾的核心。late也很容易用到，因?yàn)槊月纷匀粫ate for supper，或者天色漸晚。sight這個詞，如果是作為動作，那么可能需要放入短語使用，如：catch sight of/lose sight of/come into sight/out of sight等。2續(xù)寫段首句解讀第一段段首句“Suddenly a littel rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.”中的suddenly表明情況發(fā)生了急劇變化。反觀上文的景色描寫，可想而知“我”和父親正在欣賞沿途靜謐優(yōu)美的景色，這時突然蹦出一只兔子，肯定會打破原本平靜的基調(diào)。馬、“我”以及父親的反應(yīng)和心理活動發(fā)生的相應(yīng)變化，應(yīng)該在這一段體現(xiàn)出來。第二段段首句“We had no idea where we were and it got dark.”提示“我們”迷路了，說明在上文里“我們”因?yàn)橥米拥某霈F(xiàn)而偏離了原來的track?？赡苁亲分米硬恢挥X跑遠(yuǎn)了，也可能是馬兒受到驚嚇帶著“我”亂跑導(dǎo)致迷路，但可以肯定的是，“我們”最終還是回到了農(nóng)場。那么，在第二段，主要解決的問題是如何回農(nóng)場了。除此之外，語言層面的焦點(diǎn)更要放在人物在天黑迷路時的心理活動、環(huán)境描寫以及父親行為等的刻畫上。三、寫作思路解讀思路1兔子的突然出現(xiàn)，讓馬兒受到驚嚇，瘋狂地亂跑，完全不受韁繩控制。我一手抓住韁繩，一邊向父親呼喊求救。父親也一路快馬加鞭地緊跟我，擔(dān)心我的安全。馬兒跑了很遠(yuǎn)直到筋疲力竭才停下來，這時父親懸著的心終于也放下來。但是，我發(fā)現(xiàn)了一個嚴(yán)重的問題，那就是我們找不到來時的軌跡(track)了。我們發(fā)現(xiàn)自己迷路了而且天色已晚。我不由得覺得脊背發(fā)涼、一陣害怕。父親一邊安慰我一邊思考著回去的路。這時我們聽到了潺潺的流水聲，回想起在農(nóng)場附近也有河流，心想沿著水聲應(yīng)該可以回到農(nóng)場。結(jié)果，真的回到了農(nóng)場。Uncle Paul一家正在等我們回家吃晚飯。思路2兔子突然出現(xiàn)，它的可愛模樣引起了我的興趣，我一路跟著小白兔走著，一路欣賞著沿路的美麗景色并沉醉其中，以至于漸漸偏離了原來的軌跡而渾然不知。我們努力去回想來時的道路，但是無濟(jì)于事。我們都不確定自己到底走到了哪里，而這時候天色已晚。周圍的景色讓人感覺陰森可怕，因?yàn)榄h(huán)境陌生，我和父親都不敢輕舉妄動，生怕越走越遠(yuǎn)，碰到更大的危險，只得在原地，期待uncle能來找我們。等了一會兒之后，果然Uncle Paul拿著火炬，呼叫著我和父親的名字。最后，在uncle的帶領(lǐng)下，我們回到了農(nóng)場，得以脫險。四、寫作思路微技能第一段我們可以嘗試問這些問題：What was the rabbit like?_What was my reaction to the rabbit?_What would we see while chasing the rabbit?_What happened next?_然后進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的回答，我們就可以寫出這樣的一段文章：_參考范文Suddenly，a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. It was such a lovely creature that I followed its track.But the rabbit was quickly out of my sight.In the process of seeking for it，I was totally attracted by the charm of nature.The forests，the flowers，the groups of sheep in the far distance and the singing river all made me feel relaxed.Both Dad and I had forgotten the time and it seemed difficult for us to go back.第二段我們可以根據(jù)上一段的內(nèi)容以及段首句We had no idea where we were and it got dark，我們可以得知兩個信息迷路和天色已晚。因此我們可以圍繞這兩個信息試著提以下問題：How did I feel and how did Dad react?_Did we find the way out？How?_Who may come to our rescue?_How about the surrounding in the darkness?_然后進(jìn)行詳細(xì)的回答，我們就可以寫出這樣的一段文章：_參考范文We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.The cold wind was blowing hard and the darkness made me scared.“Dad, what can we do？”I asked. “All is going well！” Dad answered. We wandered in the forest and didn't know what would happen to us.Suddenly，we heard the sound of a river. We decided to follow the river. After a while, we heard the familiar sound of sheep and then caught sight of the farm house.(2019·杭州市質(zhì)檢)Love Will Melt Your HeartThe day before my daughter Norah's fourth birthday，something she said forecast a remarkable event.I'd just picked her up from preschool when she cautioned me to mind the elderly person walking across the parking lot at a glacier's pace. She went on to explain that she has a soft spot for mature folks: “I like old people the best because they walk slow like I do and they have soft skin like me.They all gonna die soon，so I'm gonna love them before they die.”I was struck by her thoughtfulness and empathy.The following dayher birthdayagain on the way home from school，she asked if we could stop at the grocery store to buy cupcakes. How do you say no to a birthday girl？So we headed toward the up in the cart，excitedly waving and joyfully proclaiming，“Hi, old person！It's my birthday today！”Before I could hush her，he stopped and turned_to her.His expression softened as he replied，“Well，hello，little lady！Happy birthday！”They chatted for a few minutes.Then，Norah turned to me and asked，“Can I take a picture with him？”I told her we'd certainly ask.I approached him and asked if he'd take a photo with my daughter for her birthday.His expression changed from confused to stunned to delighted.“A photo？With me？”he asked.“Yes，sure，for my birthday！”Norah answered.And so he did.I pulled out my iPhone，and they posed together.She placed her soft hand on top of his.He wordlessly stared at her with twinkling eyes as she kept his hand in hers，kissed the top of his hand and then placed it on her cheek. They were chatting like long­lost friends. I asked his name，and he told us to call him Dan. We were blocking other shoppers，but they didn't care. There was magic happening in the grocery store that day，and we could all feel it.注意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2至少使用5個以上短文中斜體的關(guān)鍵詞語；3續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1：After a few minutes，I thanked Mr. Dan for spending a bit of his day with us. He_said，“No,_thank_you._This_has_been_the_best_day_I've_had_in_a_long_time.”_He_turned_to_my_daughter._“You've_made_me_so_happy，Miss_Norah.”They_said_goodbye._I_posted_the_story_and_a_photo_of_them_on_my_._Later_that_night,_I_received_a_private_message，from_which_I_learned_that_Mr._Dan's_wife，Mary，had_passed_away_six_months_earlier._I_asked_for_Mr._Dan's_phone_number_and_called_him_a_few_days_later.Paragraph 2：A few days later，we visited Mr. Dan's tidy house. Reminders_of_Mary_still_proudly_displayed_everywhere._We_spent_nearly_three_hours_with_him_that_day._After_another_recent_visit，he_told_me_that_he_had_slept_soundly_every_night_since_meeting_my_girl.“Norah_has_healed_me，”he_said._Seventy­eight_years_separate_these_two_people_in_age._Somehow,_their_hearts_and_souls_seem_to_recognize_each_other_from_long_ago.Writing 1閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。I had to go grocery_shopping this morning for the first time in a couple of weeks.My husband had been in Greece for a few weeks and my daughters were not at_home either so I had stocked up on vegetables，salad ingredients and fruits along with the meat that I had in the freezer.I am curious.When you are in line waiting to check out，do you check out what others have in their carts？I hate to admit it，but I do.I try not to judge，but again，I suppose I do to some extentwhen I see a family in which the parents and the kids are very overweight and they are buying pop(汽水)and high­calorie snack foods.My biggest issue with groceries is that all of the processed foods are easier to get and cheaper than fresh produce and probably stretch further.It amazes me to see families buying 12 packs or 24 packs of different kinds of pop.Most of the people that I am seeing are buying regular pop，not diet.But when I was young，we bought pop on_special_occasions.For birthday parties or a camping trip，we could only have one can per day.We bought Shasta back then.I am not even sure whether it is still sold or not.We could all pick a few different_flavors that we wanted for the trip.But nowadays，pop is everywhere you go. I am glad to say that the_hospital that I work for threw_away all of their pop vending machines(自動販賣機(jī))They didn't think health care workers，patients or patients' families needed them.I was happy for the change，but other people might not think so.注意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph 1：I heard a piece of news on the radio. It is reported that 40% of American women are obese, who often eat at restaurants and fast food places. They are unwilling to cook at_home because they are lazy. But in order to stay healthy, we should buy vegetables,_ fruit and meat and make the majority of our meals at home. We can find recipes on the Internet that are good for us. We can cook various foods that we love to eat. When your family see a feast on the table, they will feel good.Paragraph 2：I love fresh fruit and I love fish. In fact, I always go grocery_shopping,_buy many fresh fruits and cook various fishes that I like. I pick a few different_flavors for my parents and my friends, which makes them happy.Writing 2閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Tawny Nelson is a single mother of four sweet little girls aged 9,5,2, and one year old. It's not easy to take care of the girls all on_her_own. Recently, she shared a story with Frank Somerville, a news anchor for KTVU News in California. He was so moved by her story that he shared it on his page.Tawny's story opened with her visiting the grocery store. It was a rainy and miserable day and by the time she got all the girls loaded in the truck and ready to head home,_it was dark and pouring down. When she tried to start her truck, it wouldn't start. With no one to call, Tawny turned to ask strangers for help to charge her truck. Hours passed and so did at least twenty_people. They all ignored her. Tired and hungry, her daughters began to act out. Tawny was filled with tears when someone knocked on her passenger window.Somerville writes, “I swear I got chills when I read what happened next.” And you will do the same when you read Tawny's story：I am the single mother of four absolutely beautiful little girls. They are 9, 5, 2, and one year old. And things have been particularly rough since my ex left. Our truck had a flat tire and I had to inflate it constantly. The driver side window motor died. And I needed a new belt. The truck was a mess. And we didn't drive anywhere unless we had to. Well, the_other_day we desperately needed to go to the store. So we loaded up and drove to the Winn Dixie about 9 blocks away. When we got out of the store it was far after dark. And it was raining heavily. I loaded my kids and groceries into the truck.注意：1所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Pargagraph 1：My battery was dead. My phone broke down. I had no family to chat with and I had to do everything on my own. I turned to more than twenty_people for help but they all turned me down. My 5­year­old girl was very hungry and began to cry. My two­year­old daughter wanted to go home and my oldest girl tried to help. I felt that I was the worst mother ever.Paragraph 2：I was crying when a gentleman stopped and offered to help me. He handed me a plate of chicken and biscuits and bottles of water. He said，“Feed your girls. I have a truck on the way and my wife will be here to take you home.” What he said was right. His wife arrived followed by our truck.We and the truck were taken home. The next morning the gentleman returned to my house with a man who replaced my battery and fixed my window. Seeing the scene I burst into tears.Writing 3閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。In my home, there is an old leather chair that I want to throw away but I can't. If you took at this picture, you'll see why. This is my dog Max and he lives in the_old_chair. It wasn't always this way. Max used to be a puppy. He ran, jumped and played. For years it seemed he never sat still. But he's 8 years old now so he's slowed down quite a bit and enjoys his time in his favorite chair like an old man.Every time I leave the house, he climbs up there and takes on a sad look. It's a face that says, “I hate it when you leave me but I'll wait here patiently until you come back.” When he was younger he'd always be waiting at_the_door and waving his tail when he heard the sound of knocking. These days his old legs are hurt a bit and getting up and down from things isn't as easy as it used to be. So when I open the door and don't see the dog standing there, my eyes immediately turn toward the living room and I see his_big_brown_eyes. The sadness is washed away from his face and I immediately go and give him a hug.If there were a million dollars sitting on_the_kitchen_table,_I would walk right to see him first. I get down on the floor so we are at eye level, put my head on his and tell him what a good_boy he is. He doesn't know a lot of human words but he knows what “good boy” means.I bought that chair 15 years ago and the leather has started to wear away. I don't mind it so much but when company comes over, I do feel a bit embarrassed. I